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WThe line graph gives information about the quantity of UK residents using three types of the transportation each day from 1970 to 2030.

WThe line graph gives information about the quantity of UK residents using three types of the transportation each day from 1970 to 2030.
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The given line chart shows data regarding the
number
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 of English citizens using three different types of commuting means every day in a span of 60 years from 1970 to 2030.
According to
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 the provided chart, there are three kinds of transportation:
cars
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 , buses , and trains.
Overall
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, after a thorough analysis of the provided line graph, it can be plainly viewed that
while
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cars
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 will be in the first place as the most commonly used means
to
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of
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 transport,
bus
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buses
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 will be the
last
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 in 2030. In the beginning, regarding
cars
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, the
number
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 of individuals who used
cars
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 to transport remained steady ( approximately 4.5
million
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 commuters) in 1970,
as well as
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, 1980, after undergoing a progressive upsurge and hit slightly more than 7.5
million
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 commuters in 2020. In 2030, the
number
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 of travellers by
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cars
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car
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 will experience a remarkable increase and will score 9
million
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 commuters.
Furthermore
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, moving to buses, the
number
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 of travellers per year, witnessed a gradual decline over the period, and it will register slightly less than 3
million
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 passengers in 2030.
Additionally
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, it is
also
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 worth noticing that the
number
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 of citizens who used trains to travel went through multiple fluctuations in the course of 40 years from 1970 to 2010;
however
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, the
number
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 of
trains'
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trains
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 passengers will undergo a sharp reduction to about 5.1
millions
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million
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 in 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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