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Nowadays, many people prefer eating out rather than cooking at home. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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At the moment a
lot
 of
people
 would like to eat out rather than prepare
meals
 at
home
 . In my opinion, many
people
 would like to eat out so I would rather advantage of the former view. On the one hand, many
people
 prefer to eat out but
this
 is not good all the
time
 because the restaurants have got a
lot
 of unhealthy
meals
 and restaurants have many old products and old
meals
 and healthy food prices are very expensive
therefore
 everybody does not buy healthy food .They are full of harmful spices and fatty foods.
As a result
, many persons appear with different illnesses.
This
 is damage to our health.
On the other hand
, we have got little
time
 because nowadays all
people
 are working somewhere or everyone has something important to do
therefore
 they have got a bit of
time
 for daily life
for instance
 cooking a meal at
home
 and making dinner.
This
 takes a
lot
 of
time
.Many
people
 prefer to eat out because when
people
 go to a restaurant they will order what they want and they have many opportunities to choose different
meals
 and
this
 does not have a
lot
 of
time
.
People
 would like waiters to serve them. All
people
 prefer it for these reasons. In conclusion everyone
people
 for good eating out and every one person for comfortable. I think eating out rather than cooking at
home
 because preparing
meals
 at
home
 takes a
lot
 of
time
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • social experience
  • cultural experience
  • variety
  • food choices
  • relief
  • cooking responsibilities
  • cost
  • health concerns
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