Theme: In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Many countries around the globe have a tendency that rural
people
are moving to cities
and the population of the countryside is going down.I think,that this
development has both good and bad sides about it.Moreover
, here i
will think about Change the capitalization
I
reasons
for that and both Correct article usage
the reasons
drawbacks
and positive sides of the tendency.
To start with,migration to big Correct article usage
the drawbacks
cities
is not done just for being modern or live
among 'better' Replace the word
living
people
,but also
for more advantages for an individual themself.For example
,better transportation or more vacancies can be a crucial benefit for some young adults,which look for more
futuristic place to live in than their countryside.Add an article
a more
Additionally
,it is evident that youngsters nowadays want to live in the city more than they want to live even in province
.
Correct article usage
a province
Nevertheless
,it has a lot of disadvantages,especially for rural areas' citizens.As people
move to cities
the quantity of people
is going down and has it's
consequences.Replace the word
its
Thus
,more and more people
want to leave those places and relocate to big megapolises.As a result
,we get overpopulated cities
,which cause many problems for local governments as traffic jams and air pollution,and abandoned countryside,which do not boost the economy as they could.
To sum up
,the migration of many citizens to bigger cities
causes many negative developments and problems with environment
,which we can see even now.Add an article
the environment
Besides
, if nothing will be
done and the trend Wrong verb form
is
will remain
we can get even more overpopulated megapolises and Wrong verb form
remains
downfall
of residential Correct article usage
the downfall
area
,which will lead to Fix the agreement mistake
areas
inability
to live there.Correct article usage
the inability
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