Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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should
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in the
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where they studied and trained,
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others believe that individuals are free to choose where they want to go.
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countries
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a
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of effort to train these
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,
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have the right to choose where they want to
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because they have their own dreams. On the one hand, teachers spend
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amount of time teaching what they know to the students. Some professions like doctors, scientists and engineers
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that
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takes
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many years.
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, governments spend a
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of money and time to train and prepare them so
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that in
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the future they can do something that could help the
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. If they
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in other
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the nation where they have studied will lose the reputation and
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a good professional.
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, many famous Chinese scientists went to the United States to
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their
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, after graduating they went back to China, but almost no one knows where they studied.
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, in my opinion,
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pay large
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of money to
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, so
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have
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enough funds from the students.
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,
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are free to choose what they want to do. Sometimes
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have wasted
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a
lot
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of money to travel to other
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to
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,
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can be because of the better reputation of the university or the
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from where they come from
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not have classes related to the career. So the only option they have is to
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in other nations and
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go back to their
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, in
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way, education in their
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can improve.
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, some developing and
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countries
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do not have engineering careers because are very difficult areas, so
people
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only can travel to other nations to
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the
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career
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. I believe that allowing
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to
work
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where they want will improve education
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all
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. In conclusion,
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countries
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spend a
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of time teaching and training
people
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, they have the right to follow their dreams or get back to their
countries
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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