Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some say that
people
should work
in the country
where they studied and trained, while
others believe that individuals are free to choose where they want to go. This
essay will argue that although
countries
do
a Verb problem
make
lot
of effort to train these people
, people
have the right to choose where they want to work
because they have their own dreams.
On the one hand, teachers spend large
amount of time teaching what they know to the students. Some professions like doctors, scientists and engineers Change the article
a large
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
takes
many years. Correct subject-verb agreement
take
Then
, governments spend a lot
of money and time to train and prepare them so in
the future they can do something that could help the Correct word choice
that in
country
. If they work
in other countries
the nation where they have studied will lose the reputation and also
a good professional. For example
, many famous Chinese scientists went to the United States to study
their career
, after graduating they went back to China, but almost no one knows where they studied. Fix the agreement mistake
careers
However
, in my opinion, people
pay large amount
of money to Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
study
, so countries
have gain
enough funds from the students.
Wrong verb form
gained
On the other hand
, people
are free to choose what they want to do. Sometimes people
have wasted
a Wrong verb form
waste
lot
of money to travel to other countries
to study
, this
can be because of the better reputation of the university or the country
from where they come from do
not have classes related to the career. So the only option they have is to Correct subject-verb agreement
does
study
in other nations and then
go back to their country
, in this
way, education in their country
can improve. For instance
, some developing and no developed
Verb problem
underdeveloped
countries
do not have engineering careers because are very difficult areas, so people
only can travel to other nations to study
the
Change the word
their
career
. I believe that allowing Fix the agreement mistake
careers
people
to work
where they want will improve education of
all Change preposition
in
countries
.
In conclusion, although
countries
spend a lot
of time teaching and training people
, they have the right to follow their dreams or get back to their countries
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