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There are many ways to find a job: newspaper advertisements, Internet job search websites, and personal recomendations. What do you think is the best way to find a job? Give reasons or examples to support your opinion.

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Some
people
 think the best ways to find a position are newspaper advertisements or Internet work search websites because they give background about the
job
. In my opinion, when I need to find a
job
 or hire a person, the best way is personal
recommendations
. I have some reasons to support my opinion which I will examine in
this
 essay. First of all, personal
recommendations
 are reliable. Obviously, when a boss or colleague demonstrates knowledge about work or projects the other
people
, whom they do recommend, it is because they are reliable about the other. It is serious and needs ethics and compromise.
This
 is best demonstrated by my personal experience, in t
last
 year, when my boss gave me a personal endorsement for a new position in a
company
. I got the position because he relied
in
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 my performance and made the recommendation.
Second,
different works need a variety of skills or abilities. Evidently, each Project or
job
 needs specific knowledge or technique. If
people
 did one personal recommendation they know about the skills other
people
 have which are needed for the
job
, it is easy for the
company
.
For instance
, internet companies need gamers and they receive personal
recommendations
 for the best
company
´s gamer, which is easier for the
company
 to hire.
Third,
save time and money to find
a work
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work
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.
In other words
, a
company
 need to hire a new employee, for it
need
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 human resource
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show
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 the
job
 in a newspaper or on websites, and it
have
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 costs.
On the other hand
, if the human resource receives one indication, it is because the person has the profile need.
For example
, personal
recommendations
 explain personality and abilities and human resources only need to compare information and decide if
ones
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have
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 the qualities needed for the
job
, it is faster and cheaper. In conclusion, in my point of view, the best way to find a
job
 is a personal recommendation because it is reliable, demonstrates skills and abilities,
in addition
save
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 time and Money.
That is
 why I believe is so important for
people
 to find a situation and have an indication
about
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 their Project or performance.
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Grammatical Range
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