You recently visited a museum with your old friend and some difficulties during the visit. Write a letter to museum management Why you visited the museum What the problem was What can be done to solve this problem
Dear Mona,
My name is Gurpinder and I am writing
this
letter to express my concern regarding a few problems that the visitor are facing during their visit to the museum, nowadays.
To begin
with, me and my friend visited yesterday around 2 p.m. She came from abroad after completing her studies. We were excited to meet each other. Therefore
, we planned to refresh some moments that we spent together in our childhood, especially in this
beautiful building. Moreover
, she is doing some research on the historical monuments and she wants to do her research on this
monument.
Although
we enjoyed our company, there have been a few things that are not working properly. Firstly
, some tube lights are not working properly. In fact, it was so dark to see things around the corner. Secondly
, there was no exit sign which confused not only us but to the other visitors. Lastly
, there was no security guard who could control the wrong activities of the public such
as graffiti.
To conclude
, this
issue can be mitigated by using appropriate methods namely, there should be a couple of cameras as well as
security guards to protect the museum. Moreover
, the lights should be repaired on time for a better look. In addition
, there would be proper signs of entrance and exit to save their time and explore properly.
I hope this
helps. Please let me know if you need any further
information.
Yours sincerely,
Gurpinder KaurSubmitted by buttargurpinder73 on
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task response
Provide more specific details about the museum visit and the problems faced. Address the issue of noise and disruptions caused by other visitors for a more comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
Organize the letter more clearly by separating the main points into distinct paragraphs. Additionally, use more cohesive devices such as linking words to connect ideas and improve overall coherence.
lexical resource
Expand the range of vocabulary used and consider using more precise and varied expressions to enhance the lexical resource.
grammatical range
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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