During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Mr. Robson,
I am writing
this
letter in regard to secure
a Chef position at one of your restaurants.
Myself Heena Parmar, I met you in a fight on 1st September 2024. I sat next to you at the side of the window and I was telling you about my hotel management course that I was going to study in Canada. You gave me your business card to apply for a job position at your restaurant.
I have been looking for a Wrong verb form
securing
part time
job as a chef. I think that working in an environment where I can acquire knowledge about my program, Add a hyphen
part-time
which
would be best for me. Correct pronoun usage
apply
This
experience will help me in my future to get a job as a manager.
I am the best person to fit this
position because I have three years of experience working as a chef from
my home country. On top of that, I am studying a course which is related to Change preposition
in
this
field.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Heena ParmarSubmitted by parmarheena277254 on
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task achievement
The introduction could be a bit more polished. Consider rephrasing the line 'Myself Heena Parmar...' to 'My name is Heena Parmar, and we met on...'.
task achievement
Try to provide a bit more detail about your skills and how they relate to the job you're interested in. This will strengthen your suitability for the job.
coherence cohesion
While the letter is clear and follows a logical sequence, improving transitional phrases between paragraphs can create even better coherence.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are very professional and courteous, which adds to the overall tone of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph contains a single idea, making your thoughts easy to follow.
task achievement
Your response is complete and provides the necessary information in a concise manner.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite