To what extent do you agree that people in high positions should get paid more than those in lower positions.

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People with higher

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hold more responsibility compared to the ones with lower

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therefore

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it is justifiable to give them more salary. Some people believe. There are several reasons why subordinates get lower

salary

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than their

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bos

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boss

. The first reason is the burden that needs to be carried out by a

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is much higher than his staff.

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, the task is more difficult.

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, mostly they have more experience than their subordinates so it's fair to give them more benefits. People with lower

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usually come from fresh

graduate

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, so

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apply

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they do not have

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skill

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to offer to the company. Even if so, they still could climb up from a certain level to

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higher level. Being a

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boss

bonus

is expected to do and achieve more.

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some staff is able to enjoy their lives

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going to a party or hanging out with friends, a

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boss

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supposed to stay in the office to do a job because it is their responsibility.

From

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my personal opinion, I used to be paid lower than my

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boss

boys

. He could get more than 1000$

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I was just paid around 700$.

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lexical resource

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

192 words

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To what extent do you agree that people in high positions should get paid more than those in lower positions.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual welbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

In many countries, the qualities of life in large cities is becoming worse. What are the cause for this problem? What measure should be taken to tackle this problem?