The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate a public library's floor
plane
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plan
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two decades ago and now.
Overall
, tables, chairs
and
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apply
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enquiry deck and other old places was removed, and replaced by
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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,
computer
room
and self-service machines these kind of modern designed
area
.
First,
20 years ago, the library had tables and chairs in the
center
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centre
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with adult
fiction
books
on its left and adult non-
fiction
books
on
its
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the
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right. A place for CDs, videos and
computer
games
were
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was
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on
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in
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the top-left
corner
;
area
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an area
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for children's
books
were
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was
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on
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in
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the top-right
corner
;
reading
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the reading
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room
. The entrance was
on
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at
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the
bottom-center
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bottom-centre
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of the library, and
reading
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the reading
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room
with newspapers and magazines was
on
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in
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the bottom-left
corner
,
Moreover
, there was
a
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an
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enquiry desk
on
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in
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the bottom-right
corner
. Nowadays, tables and chairs
was
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are
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removed. Adult
fiction
books
were replaced by all reference
books
, and
old
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the old
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area
for
adut
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adult
fiction
added an information desk and self-service machines.
Area
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The area
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for CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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games
was replace
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was replaced
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by
a
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an
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area
with children's
fiction
books
, sofas and a
plce
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place
for
story telling
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storytelling
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events.
Area
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The area
An area
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originally for children's
books
was
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apply
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bacame
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became
lecture
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a lecture
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room
, and
reading
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the reading
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room
was replaced by
computer
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a computer
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room
.
Lastly
,
enquiry
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the enquiry
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deck was replaced by
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
show examples
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, room, area, fiction, books, corner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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