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IELTS Writing task 2: Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by private companies rather than governments. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Write an essay with at least 250 words

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The question of whether scientific
research
 should be conducted and controlled by private companies
instead
 of governmental bureaus has sparked
a lively debates
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.
While
 there are both advantages and disadvantages of privately-based studies, I contend that the disadvantages can surpass
its
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 advantages. On the one hand,
this
 can bring a benefit regarding the expense if scientific
research
 is undertaken by private businesses. In fact, private corporations often possess substantial financial resources, enabling them to do
research
 more efficiently and rapidly.
Moreover
, private funding can relieve the burden on government budgets, freeing up resources for other essential societal needs.
On the other hand
,
privately-funded
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 scientific
research
 may cause considerable concerns. First and foremost, the pursuit of profit may lead to a focus on
research
 areas that promise immediate financial returns, potentially neglecting less profitable fields
but
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for social gains
such
 as anthropology, geography, sociology or psychology.
Additionally
, private control may limit public access to
research
 findings and lack a guarantee of
the
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quality. Proprietary interests could lead to limited accessibility potentially withholding significant breakthroughs from the wider scientific community.
Conversely
, government-funded
research
 is more likely to prioritize open access, which enables researchers to give peer reviews and the quality of these studies can be scrutinized. In conclusion,
while
 private companies' involvement in scientific
research
 is cost-efficient, the potential drawbacks cannot be ignored.
Therefore
, a balance between private and government control may be the most prudent approach for the betterment of
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society.
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task response
Provide a clear position on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and present a balanced argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly summarize the main points of the essay.
lexical resource
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grammatical range
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Scientific research
  • Private sector
  • Public sector
  • Resource allocation
  • Innovation
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Development cycles
  • Public interest
  • Ethical standards
  • Intellectual property
  • Regulation
  • Oversight
  • Accountability
  • Collaboration
  • Shared resources
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