The table shows data about the underground railway systems in six major cities with the date opened, kilometers of the route, and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about the underground railway systems in six major cities with the date opened, kilometers of the route, and passenger numbers per year in millions.
The table gives information about the subway system in six thriving cities ; their launch dates, distances per route and the total number of passengers in a year.
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, the older railway transportation services, catered for more people and travelled more distance and in the same way, the later the train networks operated, the fewer the journeys travelled for each route. As for
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means of transportation in London, Paris and Tokyo which were
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earlier introduced in 1863, 1900 and 1927 respectively carried 775,000,000, 1,191,000 ,000 and 1,927,000,000 individuals respectively. In the same
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the British network seemed to cover twice the kilometres of the French and Japanese underground service.
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the two major cities in the USA; Washington and Los Angeles operated a means of movement for people that could only
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144 ,000,000 and 50,000,000 humans
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in 1981, with a total distance of 11 kilometres was well suited for almost half the number of people in a train from Washington.
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