J. You have unexpectedly come into a large sum of money and you want to share this good news with your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● explain where the money came from ● say what you intend to do with the money ● invite your friend to celebrate your good fortune. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___________,

#j #sum #money #news #friend #fortune #___________

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Dear Nav Hope

this

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letter of mine treats you well ! I am excited to share

a great news

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great news

a piece of great news

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with you that I unexpectedly won 2 Lakh rupees

last

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month

while

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buying a coffee packet. I was not aware that Cafe

coffee day

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Coffee Day

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had launched

new

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a new

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flavour and 2 lucky customers will

won

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win

be won

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exciting prizes. I felt myself

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cloud 9 when I opened the packet to make some coffee.

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, I thought to share

this

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good news with you

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apply

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first. I am planning to buy an

Iphone

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iPhone

from

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with

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this

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money.

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, I have plans to spend the remaining amount on my family. Afterwards, the rest of the amount will be given to charity. It is been so long

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since we

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have not met, so some of the amount will be invested

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our great time together. Come soon and let us

hangout

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hang out

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at some beautiful Cafe. Can't wait to meet you ! With Love Rajvir

Submitted by rajvir on Wed Nov 15 2023

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greeting and closing

Ensure that your greeting and closing are more formal and appropriate for a letter to a friend.

logical structure

Ensure that each paragraph contains only one main idea for better clarity and coherence.

complete response

Respond to all parts of the prompt, including explaining where the money came from and what you intend to do with it.

lexical resource

Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and fluently.

grammatical range

Demonstrate a wider range of sentence structures and more accurate use of complex grammatical forms.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

156 words

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