In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railways for very fast train between cities. other belive the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

There are various types of
transportation
a
city
can have, it can be in the form of land, water, and air
transportation
. In regards
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land
transportation
, some
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that rapid trains across cities are needed,
while
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others believe the budget is better allocated for public
transports
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improvement.
This
essay will discuss the underlying reasons to
support
both views and find the balance between them.
Transportations
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can be a means to
support
the growth of local
business
and having those between cities will attract more customers and suppliers. Whoosh, the name of
high-speed
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train connecting Bandung and Jakarta,
built
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with the same purpose. Indeed having fast train do
support
the
business
by enabling customer from Jakarta to come for leisure and eventually increase local income
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.
However
,
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poor infrastructure within
city
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the city
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will provide
unpleasant
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experience
for the
tourist
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itself
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.
Thus
,
combination
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of better
transportation
between cities and within
city
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is pivotal.
On the other hand
, increasing public comfort
while
nurturing
healthy
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environment is the goal of improving current public transport. Looking at the same
business
angle, possessing diverse
type
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types
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and better public
transportations
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transportation
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are necessary to reduce traffic and pollution and boost
visitors
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visitors'
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experience
during their stay.
For instance
, Puncak has little to
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public transport
support
, resulting
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traffic
jam
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, especially during rush hour, which brings down the
overall
satisfaction of the visit. Maintaining
enjoyable
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experience
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experiences
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together with
improving accessibility will be beneficial
for
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business
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a business
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perspective. In conclusion, it is crucial to find
middle
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ground between initiatives to improve
transportation
for
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within and across
city
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the city
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, as both will cater
different
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purposes. Public transport within
city
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will
be improve
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with
aim
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to provide
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better
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a better
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experience
, whilst
transportation
across
city
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the city
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using
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the train
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train
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trains
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will be beneficial for the growth of
local
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the local
a local
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business
.
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