The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training.

The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training.
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illustrates
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different kinds of communication training employees took and the reason
way
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why
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they
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to do so in an international company.
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, most employees went to part-time training in the evening, and
least
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people went to
distant
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learning. Meanwhile, most people went to the
trainings
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because of holiday travel. To start with, the percentage of part-time training in the evening was the highest among all, which was 39% followed by part-time training
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the weekends and self-tuition, both of which
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22%. The figure for
distant
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learning was 12%, and
lastly
, the number of intensive training was only 5% which was the lowest.
On the other hand
, 46%
employees
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of employees
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choose
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those training
due to
holiday travel which was the biggest reason. The figure for business travel, personal interest and other reasons was 17%, 14% and 13%,
while
the number of communication with clients was only 10% which was the
fewest
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lowest
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.
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