THE FOREST AND THE NEED TO PRESERVE IT. WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THAT?
A plethora of
Deforestation
has been increasing day by day due to
rapid
increase of buildings. In the cities cutting plants pollution is being arisen. Correct article usage
the rapid
However
, the affects
of Replace the word
effects
plants
cutting Change the noun form
plant
is
being suffered by humans. Many problems are generated by Change the verb form
are
Deforestation
and human is also
taking part in this
situation. This
essay will elaborate further
in the following paragraphs
In the contemporary world
, advanced buildings are made by organisations to enhance their work so they cut down plants in the towns. Because of a heavy machines
they Correct the article-noun agreement
heavy machines
a heavy machine
produces
carbon dioxide and Change the verb form
produce
polluted
the climate. A Wrong verb form
pollute
multi national
companies are produced Add a hyphen
multi-national
such
gases which a human cannot breath
well. To illustrate Replace the word
breathe
this
, in my city air quality index is
crossed 350 Verb problem
has
due to
smog on
the winter seasons and the local government is coping to minimise Change preposition
in
this
index. Although
, different viruses are Correct word choice
However
being affected to
people's health Wrong verb form
affecting
condition
like Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
eyes infection
and soar Fix the agreement mistake
eye infections
throat
etc. The government should Fix the agreement mistake
throats
be banned for
Wrong verb form
ban
such
companies whose are
Verb problem
that
polluted
the environment.
Wrong verb form
pollute
In addition
, human activity and other factors result in deforestation
. To clear the natural landscapes to make room for farmers and pastures, to harvest timber, and to build roads and houses.Tropical forests of all varieties, in particular
, are disappearing rapidly by human activity. Consequently
, this
change is threatened
Wrong verb form
threatens
for
a human's life. The administration may control Change preposition
apply
human's
Change noun form
human
practice
to reduce the deterioration Fix the agreement mistake
practices
in
the Change preposition
of
world
.
In a nutshell, cutting forests is being raised by community
because of their activities and producing hazardous Add an article
the community
affects
in the Replace the word
effects
world
. In my opinion, Deforestation
should not be allowed in the forest because it has to be reserved for people to see the beauty of the world
.Submitted by mobinadurrani43 on
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task response
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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
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grammatical range
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including verb tense, article use, and preposition errors. More complex sentence structures and accurate grammar usage are needed to improve the grammatical range.
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