THE FOREST AND THE NEED TO PRESERVE IT. WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THAT?

A plethora of
Deforestation
has been increasing day by day
due to
rapid
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increase of buildings. In the cities cutting plants pollution is being arisen.
However
, the
affects
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of
plants
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cutting
is
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being suffered by humans. Many problems are generated by
Deforestation
and human is
also
taking part in
this
situation.
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in the following paragraphs In the contemporary
world
, advanced buildings are made by organisations to enhance their work so they cut down plants in the towns. Because of
a heavy machines
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they
produces
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carbon dioxide and
polluted
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the climate. A
multi national
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companies are produced
such
gases which a human cannot
breath
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well. To illustrate
this
, in my city air quality index
is
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crossed 350
due to
smog
on
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the winter seasons and the local government is coping to minimise
this
index.
Although
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, different viruses are
being affected to
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people's health
condition
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conditions
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like
eyes infection
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eye infections
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and soar
throat
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etc. The government should
be banned for
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such
companies
whose are
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polluted
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the environment.
In addition
, human activity and other factors result in
deforestation
. To clear the natural landscapes to make room for farmers and pastures, to harvest timber, and to build roads and houses.Tropical forests of all varieties,
in particular
, are disappearing rapidly by human activity.
Consequently
,
this
change
is threatened
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for
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a human's life. The administration may control
human's
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practice
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practices
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to reduce the deterioration
in
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the
world
. In a nutshell, cutting forests is being raised by
community
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the community
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because of their activities and producing hazardous
affects
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in the
world
. In my opinion,
Deforestation
should not be allowed in the forest because it has to be reserved for people to see the beauty of the
world
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • deforestation
  • carbon sequestration
  • sustainable forest management
  • ecosystem
  • climate regulation
  • habitat preservation
  • renewable resources
  • environmental balance
  • conservation
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