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Computers are becoming parts of many classrooms all around the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion.

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Worldwide, the usage of
Computers
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have
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 increased a lot in
Education
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the Education
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 sector.
Computers
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 can be both good
as well as
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 bad for
students
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 depending upon the intention of usage. The positive features of
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 which
makes
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 them efficient for usage are their connectivity to the
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 and ease of doing
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,
computers
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 provide internet connections which ultimately
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students
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 to discover new ideas and create a better understanding between them.
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,
computer
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 plays a vital role in most of the thesis done in universities. Generally, all developed countries use
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 in schools to enhance their education.
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, All the classrooms in
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the U.S.A.
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 have computer systems installed so that
students
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 can learn
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subjects
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 more effectively and efficiently.
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, the ability to learn a subject is highest in
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 as compared to others. There are
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 many disadvantages of
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Firstly
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, it disconnects
students
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 from the real
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Students
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 become so involved in
virtual
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world
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 that they get distracted from the real
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computers
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 younger generations, specifically,
students
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 becoming socially inactive.
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research in Australia, the researchers found that the
students
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 who study through digital platforms
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 less in cultural activities as compared to
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 who attend traditional
pen-paper based
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 lectures.
To sum up
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,
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 can be beneficial
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 if used wisely. Classrooms should be introduced to
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alongwith
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along with
 traditional teaching methods.
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task response
Expand on the advantages and disadvantages of computers in classrooms. Present a balanced view of both the positive and negative aspects to demonstrate your understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay needs improvement. Make sure to include an introduction that introduces the topic and a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates your opinion. Also, ensure that the main points are logically supported and connected throughout the essay.
lexical resource
Enhance your use of vocabulary to express ideas more clearly and precisely. Make use of a wider range of vocabulary to avoid repetition and add depth to your arguments.
grammatical range
Work on your sentence structure to improve clarity and accuracy. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, verb tense, and word order to reduce errors and enhance the overall fluency of your writing.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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