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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The Maps represent the plans of a Central library 20 decades ago and the changes that have been made to it today.
Overall
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, noticeable features are the
installment
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instalment
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 of more furniture and machines in new locations and their removal from the original location which was in the centre of the
room
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as well as
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 the enlargement of some sections.
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 it can be said that most of the sections like:
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media
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the media
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corner
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, one of the regions where adult books were located and
reading
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the reading
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room
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 have been replaced, the kiddies literature and information desk were moved to another space. 20 years ago, there were some tables and chairs in the centre and adult hard copy books on either side of these. To the upper left
corner
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 were some digital
media
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 and to the right were
children
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children's
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 stories and just to the entrance on either side was print
media
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 on the left and an information table on the other side. Today the space which housed the digital
media
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 has been expanded and equipped with shelves for
children
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children's
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media
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,
storytelling
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a storytelling
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 event
corner
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 and some sofas
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, one of the overaged fictional book stands was swapped for a reference
room
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, the other on the right remained with an enquiry desk and
self service
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 machines. The reading
room
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 became an IT
room
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 and the former educational desk a Cafe
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 the former children's
corner
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 a lecture
room
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, media, corner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • modern technology
  • computer stations
  • multimedia room
  • multi-purpose spaces
  • conference rooms
  • study spaces
  • community-oriented services
  • accessibility
  • wider aisles
  • ramps
  • designated areas
  • people with disabilities
  • cafeteria
  • coffee shop
  • leisurely space
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