Write about the following topic: Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss hoth these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for vour answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Prominent professional

athletes

earn a large sum of

paycheck

compared to other important occupations, which led to the discourse

of

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the fairness of

this

issue.

While

some may feel that the unattainable

level

of money is quite unfair, I feel that the important thing to highlight is how a

lot

of effort and

risk

is needed to be a prominent

athlete

, justifying their

level

of

paycheck

. Those who think that

this

condition is unfair often argue that there are more important occupations, and that

athlete

is far less crucial in comparison to them.

For example

, some may think

feel

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that

the

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teachers are more deserving

for

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the large wage as their role

can

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help children to learn positive things which is regarded

to

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contribute and bring positive impacts to

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society.

However

,

athletes

can

also

give

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positive impacts by being the children’s role

model

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to exercise and lead a healthy lifestyle.

Although

less direct,

this

shows that the occupation

also

can contribute to

the

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society, which may help justify their

paycheck

level

.

On the other hand

, some

that

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perceive and think that the

athlete

deserve

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the sum of

paycheck

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that they receive usually

considers

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the hardship experienced by the

athletes

to achieve their

level

of success. To reach them,

they

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will require an unimaginable effort needed to be done by someone who

wanted

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to be one.

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, to maintain their prime condition, they will need to take caution

on

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what they consume and refrain from unhealthy foods, unlike

other profession

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another profession

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that does not restrict someone

to eat

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what they want. Other than that, to become a successful

athlete

comes with a

lot

of

risk

, as they will usually need to start early from their childhood which will take a

lot

of their elementary school time.

This

leads to the

risk

if they fail or give up in the middle of their training, they will not only lose all years of training

,

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but

also

will be left behind in terms of the academic

level

due to

a

lot

of missed classes hindering them to excel in other type of occupations.

In addition

, we can

also

see many instances of

a

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less fortunate and established

athletes

who earn a

lot

less

of

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money, showing that there are risks involved if someone

is

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choosing to train to be an

athlete

as their success is not guaranteed.

To conclude

,

although

some people may feel unfairness in terms of the wage

level

of prominent

athletes

, the number of people

that is earning

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that much is not the majority of the

entire

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athletes

that

exists

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and only those who are famous and successful enough to be widely known. Showing that their

paycheck

are

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justified as they have overcome a high

risk

and have been through

large

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number of efforts to be where they are right now.