The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The chart illustrates the usage of electronic technology and how much time doing homework in
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households
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in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
,it can seen that,in the started time the
use
of machines was low percentage but day to day
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was
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increased and in the early decades people
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with
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themselves
instead
of machines.
To begin
with,in 1920 the
use
of refrigerators was zero and it
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sharply went up
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52% in 1940
moreover
,it
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consistently increased and reached
at
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90% in 1960.During the 1980 to 2000 used 100%.
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,
the
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work with electronics was
commonly
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in
the
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houses and
use
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the use
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of vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and washing
machine
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machines
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30%,40% in 1920,it was slightly increased in 1940
at
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50%,
60
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and 60
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% but
1980
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the
use
of washing machine minimum decreased and in 2019 71% in
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of the period
although
,the vacuum cleaner used during the six years period increased and reached at 100% in 2019.
On the other hand
, the number of
hours
of housework in 1920 almost 50
hours
per week it was top of the list in
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year after that it was declined in 1940
approximately
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30
hours
and in 2019 lowest ratio around 10
hours
per week .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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