Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. What are the causes of the phenomenon and what are some of the possible solutions?
In recent times, the incidence of usage of drugs to enhance performance by athletes has been rising. The main culprit of
this
trend is the huge pressure faced by the player and it can easily be fixed by better screening for banned substances in body
of the Add an article
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sports person
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sportsperson
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essay will discuss the causes and provide solutions for this
problem with a resonable
conclusion.
The most important cause for athletes to consume unapproved supplements is because they are expected to win by a very Correct your spelling
reasonable
lage
population. Correct your spelling
large
This
puts the palyer
on the spot and they feel the need to win the tournament at any cost since Correct your spelling
player
loosing
is Correct your spelling
losing
asssociated
with letting down the country Correct your spelling
associated
along with
thousands of people. For instance
, many psychologist
claim that Change to a plural noun
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drug seeking
behaviour in Add a hyphen
drug-seeking
sports
is associated with performance anxiety which is because of the pressure faced by the athlete.
However
, such
incidences can be stopped if every sports person
is screened for banned substances in their body before each major competition. Multiple blood , urine and other samples must be obtained and should be Correct your spelling
sportsperson
analised
for various drugs and if the results turn out positive the culprit must face Correct your spelling
analysed
necessary
consequences. Correct article usage
the necessary
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method will ensure and
fair and healthy sportsmanship and eliminate the problem at hand. Correct word choice
apply
For example
, according to
the Times Of India, the usage of drugs in professional sports
has gone down since India started testing players more vigilantly.
In conclusion, the growing phenomenon of usage of unauthorised substances in sports
is primarily due to
expectation that is
projected on the player by millions of people and it can easily be solved by running tests on the athlete.Submitted by insighttribez on
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