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The graph shows student enrolments at the University of Westchester.

The graph shows student enrolments at the University of Westchester.
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The given bar chart illustrates student
admission
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 at the University of Westchester from 1875 to 2024.Units are measured in thousands of
students
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, all trends demonstrated positive growth over the
period
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 in question,
although
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 at different rates. In more detail, male
students
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’ growth started at just below 1000
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admission
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admissions
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 between 1875 and 1899.The following 75 years saw a swell to roughly 12000
students
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. Since 1974 the figure for male
students
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 reached the peak of 14000
students
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, before falling slightly to just about 14000
students
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 in 2020-2024.The percentage of female
students
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 equalled approximately 750
students
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 from 1900 to 1924,
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 it started to go up sharply to more than 4000
students
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. Regarding the index of
admission
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 at the age over 25 years made up on the same level as female
students
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 ( around 750
students
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),
then
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 it demonstrated a dramatic rise to just over 10000
students
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.Foreign
students
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 began to study at
this
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 university in 1950-1974 and the figure was just below 4000
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admission
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admissions
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,
however
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, it showed a jump to almost 10000
enlistment
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enlistments
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at the end
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 of the
period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words admission, students, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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