the graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purpose between 1989 and 2009
The given line graph illustrates the people who
was
visited to United Kingdom for three different reasons from 1889 to 2009.
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apply
Overall
, amoung
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among
holiday
, business and meeting friends and relatives, vacation was the highest number of visitors recorded and it remained high throughout the years. Fix the agreement mistake
holidays
In contrast
, the least purpose of the visit was the meeting
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meet
beloved
ones. Correct your spelling
loved
Also
, another reason was the business gradully
increased in the given period of time.
In the year Correct your spelling
gradually
of
1989, vacation was at around 6.5 Change preposition
apply
million
and it remained constant for following
few years. At the same time minimum number of people arrived Correct article usage
the following
for getting
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to get
along with
their loved ones and it was at 3.5 million
. In contrast
, the purpose of business reason
suddenly dropped from 5 Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
million
to 4 million
at the begining
of the period. But it rose with fluctuation throughout the years up to 8 Correct your spelling
beginning
million
.
When looking at tourist
who arrived for leisure dramatically Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
increaed
to peak amount in the year 2000. Correct your spelling
increased
However
it suddenly dropped to Add a comma
However,
nealy
6 Correct your spelling
nearly
million
in 2004. But it rose again steadily at peak at the end
of the year.Submitted by n_wara11 on
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