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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #company
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 of
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works and companies,Many folks believe starting their career with a huge institution rather than
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 small one is better.
while
,
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 others have a
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 view. In
this
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this
 perspective and give my opinion. Working
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 a large company which has a good reputation
are
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 more challenging. it requires
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job training and high standards of certificates. Even more,work experience certificate . In spite of these challenging requirements it
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 convenient
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others
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people .
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,it has not only a high productivity But
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good
efficiently
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so
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that
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cause
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 to offers for employees satisfied-salary And financial rewards.
Moreover
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 Beneficial facilities like medical insurance for workers and their employees.
In
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conversely
, small companies which require
sensiable
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sensible
 requirements
such
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the
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recent
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 graduated people and younger
chancees
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chances
chance
 to start their
career
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.
also
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motivite
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motivate
 them by
establish
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 a workshop and courses to expand
the
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works
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 and knowledge. And for me it’s more
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 and agree with that. In conclusion, working
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 a company either small or large, depends on
peoples
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 standards and qualifications but the most critical issues to be in my mind
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 job satisfaction and
decent
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 salary that covers life’s needs.
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Introduction
Provide a clear introduction with a distinct thesis statement that addresses the topic directly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure logical sequencing of ideas and paragraphs with a clear progression, and use cohesive devices effectively.
Lexical Resource
Use topic-specific vocabulary to strengthen the argument, avoiding overgeneralisation and repetition.
Task Response
Develop each main point with relevant examples and detailed explanations to support your opinion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Use a variety of sentence structures and ensure correct grammatical usage to convey ideas clearly.
Conclusion
Conclude your essay by summarizing the main points and restating your opinion in a clear manner.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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