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The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The two pie charts
illustrates
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 data
of
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on
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 the types of
transport
 which were popularly used in the town of Cambridge in 2008 and 2018.In overview, some people in
UK
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the UK
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uses
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use
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 different modes of
transport
 when travelling
while
 others prefer to walk. First of all, in the year 2008, cars were
dominated
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 in England with a maximum percentage of 42 followed by busses at 30
percent
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.
Furthermore
, humans
favours
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prefer
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 to use motor vehicles and buses when moving from one place to the other,
as a result
 of
this
, they
reached
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reach
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thier
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their
 destinations in time
due to
 the fastness and
consistent
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 of the mode of
transport
.
Moreover
, others
also
 use bicycles, but
less
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fewer
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 of them, they were about 17% and 11% were those who
stepping
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step
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 to and from their journeys.
Additionally
, some changes
occured
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occurred
 in 2018 in
UK
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the UK
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,
this
 was when 25 per cent of the families
prefered
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preferred
 to step and
using
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use
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 public
transport
 to go to work or to town.Moreso, cyclists rapidly increase to 30% from 17% which means bicycles become cheaper than cars.
Popularity
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The popularity
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 of vehicles sharply decreased by 22
percent
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per cent
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 during a period of
decade
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a decade
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,
this
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which
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 can explain
that
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why
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 using vehicles
were
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was
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 a bit expensive.
Lastly
, the number of pedestrians
also
 slightly grew from 11% to 25% for them to budget their costs.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words transport with synonyms.
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