Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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Topic Vocabulary:

Community spirit
Isolation
Surveillance
Safety and security
Vulnerability
Support networks
Local gatherings
Foster
Social media platforms
Neighbourhood watch
Emergency situations
Natural disasters
Shared resources
Crime rates

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