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Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbors
As it is clearly observed that these days, many
people
 living in modern society do not know their nearest
neighbors
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neighbours
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. There are many underlying reasons why
this
 phenomenon happened, and several methods can be solutions for
this
happen
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. Nowadays, the world is more and more developed, all of the
people
 are very busy with their job. If they have free time, they will spend
this
 time on family. So, they may forget about their neighbour and do not care about that.
besides
 that, with the new trends,
people
 would rather have a peaceful
life
 than a noisy
life
. They try to avoid making friends or chatting with
neighbours
 because
people
 do not want to be told a bad story by their
neighbours
. Some families think that their
neighbours
 are too talkative for them
t
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to
 make friends or take care.
In contrast
, if many
people
 do not know their
neighbours
in
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for
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 a long time when they live there,
it
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there
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 will
appear
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 some
risk
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risks
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 in their
life
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lives
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.
For example
, we live alone in your house. Suddenly you are sick or there is a happening in the house ( crime, fire). From that , if you make friends with
neighbours
, they will help
us
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you
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.
Moreover
, we should have a good relationship with families living near our house, we will not be alone and uninteresting.
To sum up
, in my opinion, I think
people
 should know their
neighbours
 to help
partner
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partners
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 or have
assistant
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assistance
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.
Further
, have a friendly
life
, all of the
people
 will love their
life
. we should change, adapt
with
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to
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new
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the new
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 environment, more outgoing.

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