The diagram shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whrere relevant.

The diagram shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whrere relevant.
The diagram illustrates how
plastic
bottles
are recycled and
being
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used again in a cycle.
Overall
, the process of recycling used
plastic
bottles
consists of 9 stages,
begining
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beginning
with people putting away
plastic
bottles
into recycling
bin
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bins
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, and ending up with producing end products.
At
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the
begining
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beginning
, people throw away recyclable trash
such
as
plastic
bottles
into specific bins.
Next
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Next,
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the
plastic
bottles
are collected and
transfered
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transferred
by recycling trucks. In the next stage, at the Recycling
centre
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, collected material is sorted by hand.
Sequently
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Consequently
,
bottles
are compressed into blocks,
then
the blocks are crushed into a container.After which, shredded plastics are washed in the container.
Next,
shredded plastics undergo a machine, and
plastic
pellets are made. Following by, pellets are heated.
Raw
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material is formed
as a result
of heating pellets.
Then
, raw materials are sorted
,
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and
are
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sent to factories. Factories produce final products
such
as
plastic
bottles
and
plastic
bags from the raw material. At
last
, consumers throw away used products into recycling bins and
this
cycle continues .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles with synonyms.
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