The provided diagram illustrates how bricks are produced for the building industry.

The provided diagram illustrates how bricks are produced for the building industry.
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The provided diagram illustrates how bricks are produced for the building industry.
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is a seven-step man-made process
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how one of the crucial
material
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materials
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is made from the beginning to the end. First of all, the clay needs to be dug from the surface by an excavator and transported on a metal grid
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placed above the roller. After that, the crushed pieces of clay are mixed with some water and sand. The base can be poured in mould or cut in rectangular form.
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they need to be dried in
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an oven
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for one to two days with temperatures of two hundred degrees Celsius in moderate mode right to more than
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degrees.
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they are cooled for 48 to 72 hours. Afterwards, the bricks are packaged and delivered to future customers. It is interesting to note that the whole process of brick manufacturing takes more than three or five days.
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