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The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram shows how a central heating
system
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 of a
house
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 works. As is observed from the illustration, the central heating machine comprises several mechanical aspects and forms a complex
system
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.
According to
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 the given illustration, for the central heating machine to work the cold
water
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 supply is required and
this
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water
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 flows to the storage tank and the overflow pipe is there to store the excess
water
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 in storage. The
water
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 is passed through a boiler which is either gas or oil driven and a pump is connected with it. The radiators are connected with the boiler and these radiators are made of small tubes. When the cold
water
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 passes through the pump and boiler, it gains temperature and becomes hot
water
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 and from the
water
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 taps, the
house
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 members get hot
water
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.
Thus
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 the whole
system
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 that covers the
house
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 keeps it warm. In summary, the central heating
system
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 mainly works by flowing
water
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 through the
house
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 and increasing the temperature of it.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words system, house, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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