The following table shows the number of factory workers for a given time period in Germany.

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the table illustrates the figures for total operators for both genders and the number of industries from 1851 to 1901 in Germany. It is conspicuous that the total

employees

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experienced a downward movement

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throughout

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the number of factories fluctuated. In terms of male workers, the number started from 287 100 in 1851

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decreased gradually over the years and the most significant drop was recorded in 1861 when it plummeted noticeably by more than 150 000 until it reached the lowest figure of 31 000 in 1901.

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, the female employees witnessed a slight decline in the meantime commencing with 190 000 in 1851 and the most dramatic decrease was noted in 1871 by 100 000

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with other years when it dropped only by 10 000. In general, the total labour workforce was impacted by the decreasing tendency of both genders when it began from 477 100 in 1851 but dwindled remarkably to almost 61 000 in 1901.

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, the total of plants grew from 225 to 721 factories in 1881 before it went down to 600 in the

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year of the period.

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