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It is so difficult for little ordinary people can do to improve the environmental problems today. Therefore, the state leader and big companies should be taking charge of solving the amount of environmental damage. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that the world is facing many serious environmental issues that affect not only individuals but
also
 the natural habitats of the Earth. Some people believe that it is not in the hands of the public and that it is more the responsibility of governments to tackle
this
 issue. I believe that both factors play an equal and crucial role in handling
this
 problem.
To begin
 with, the public can take some steps at their level to address
this
 issue.
Firstly
, they can start using more degradable products rather than plastic, which can reduce pollution.
For example
, a survey by the Times of India shows that in Indian households, the usage of plastic is 65% of their everyday lives.
Secondly
, with the usage of renewable energy, individuals can contribute to saving fossil fuels. Using more electric transportation and public transportation rather than their own personal vehicles
also
 reduces air pollution and noise pollution caused by traffic.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 the government officials' responsibility to take some serious steps. They can introduce some policies that encourage the use of sustainable sources of energy.
For instance
, countries like India and Canada have completely banned the use of plastic. Providing subsidies and investing more to promote and use green energy is
also
 an effective way to address
this
 issue. Authorities can invest more in making local transportation electric.
To conclude
, environmental issues pose threats to humankind. Depending on the view that it is not the duty of either the government or local people is incorrect. I believe that both factors need to contribute.
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relevant specific examples
Try to include more specific examples beyond surveys and government cases to strengthen arguments.
complete response
Continue to balance arguments well, showing how both public and governmental efforts are needed.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly sets up the argument, stating that both the public and the government play essential roles.
logical structure
The essay follows a logical structure, presenting public responsibilities first, then governmental responsibilities.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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