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Plastic bags,bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem?

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Nowadays,
everyone
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use
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bags
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 to carry
the
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things
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.
plastic
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bags
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,bottles and packaging are affected our environment.
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although
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,
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use
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the use
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 of
plastic
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bags
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 and bottles
cause
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causes
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 the
deseas
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disease
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spread
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the
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air pollution, the
government
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 should take action to recycle
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this kind
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these kinds
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 of
things
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.I will discuss both points and
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will clear
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 my point of view in the forthcoming paragraph.
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 with,
lot
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 of
use
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things
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which
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made of
plastic
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 that
easy
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are easy
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 to carry items but
wo
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we
 do not know that it can bad impact
for
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on
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 our environment.
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,when we
use
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plastic
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 containers and
plastic
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bags
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,we throw
outside
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them outside
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 without any hesitation
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cause
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causes
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the
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pollution.Many
Europe
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European
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 countries even every person in these countries
lookafter
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after
 themselves but in Pakistan,particularly we would talk about the big city Karachi very polluted city and everywhere can see you garbage that
mostly
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 made of
plastic
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things
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cause
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causes
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 air pollution
moreover
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,air
effected
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 our health that reason of serious deseas asthma and
also
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 cancer which is damage our lungs.To illustrate,we should avoid
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use
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plastic
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bags
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 and bottles and if we have to
used
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 these equipment
then
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 we dispose carefully.
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,the
government
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 should solve
this
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 problem because it is necessary for our society.To cite an example,the
government
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 should make
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strict rules that
everyone
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throw
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this
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this thing
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things
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 in the dustbin and after that one of the
method
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methods
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 of recycling,it tend to spread our society and people aware
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this
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of this
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 concept
such
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 as many countries utilise these
things
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.The community should
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 a major
rule
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 in
this
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everyone
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put
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 their role
then
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 our problem
solve
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 very quickly.
To conclude
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,
everyone
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 should avoid
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using
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use
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plastic
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bags
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government
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 should
aware
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be aware
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 the society that they implement
the
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a
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 disposal system and
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also
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recycling system.

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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear and cohesive structure, with abrupt transitions and confusing progression of ideas. Work on outlining your essay with clear logical sequences, and use transition words or phrases to better connect your paragraphs and sentences.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, but they are too simplistic and do not properly frame your essay. An effective introduction should paraphrase the question and clearly state your position or outline the structure of the essay. The conclusion should summarize your main points and reassert your stance without introducing new information.
task achievement
While you have attempted to address the question, your response is incomplete and sometimes off-topic. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific point related to the question. Develop your ideas fully and stay focused on the task at hand.
task achievement
Your essay lacks clarity, and the comprehensive development of ideas is not evident. Work on explaining your ideas more clearly and support them with specific examples or arguments. Avoid vague statements and ensure each paragraph has one clear main idea.
task achievement
You have attempted to provide examples, but they are too general or do not directly support your point. Aim to include more detailed and directly relevant examples to strengthen your arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • wildlife
  • marine life
  • decompose
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • waterways
  • flooding
  • soil
  • groundwater
  • government regulations
  • single-use plastics
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • plastic consumption
  • recycle
  • dispose of
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