Plastic bags,bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem?
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everyone
use
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uses
bags
to carry the
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apply
things
.plastic
bags
,bottles and packaging are affected our environment.although
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Although
use
of Correct article usage
the use
plastic
bags
and bottles cause
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causes
deseas
and Correct your spelling
disease
also
spread
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spreads
the
air pollution, the Correct article usage
apply
government
should take action to recycle this kind
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these kinds
things
.I will discuss both points and also
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my point of view in the forthcoming paragraph.
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clarify
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a lot
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things
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plastic
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are easy
wo
do not know that it can bad impact Correct your spelling
we
for
our environment.Change preposition
on
For example
,when we use
plastic
containers and plastic
bags
,we throw outside
without any hesitation Correct pronoun usage
them outside
that
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which
cause
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causes
the
pollution.Many Correct article usage
apply
Europe
countries even every person in these countries Correct your spelling
European
lookafter
themselves but in Pakistan,particularly we would talk about the big city Karachi very polluted city and everywhere can see you garbage that Correct your spelling
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things
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causes
moreover
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our health that reason of serious deseas asthma and Verb problem
affects
also
cancer which is damage our lungs.To illustrate,we should avoid to
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using
use
plastic
bags
and bottles and if we have to used
these equipment Change the verb
use
then
we dispose carefully.
Furthermore
,the government
should solve this
problem because it is necessary for our society.To cite an example,the government
should make the
strict rules that Correct article usage
apply
everyone
throw
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throws
this
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this thing
these things
things
in the dustbin and after that one of the method
of recycling,it tend to spread our society and people aware Change to a plural noun
methods
this
concept Change preposition
of this
such
as many countries utilise these things
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in Correct your spelling
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put
their role Wrong verb form
puts
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our problem solve
very quickly.
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solves
To conclude
,everyone
should avoid to
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using
use
plastic
bags
,the government
should aware
the society that they implement Add a missing verb
be aware
the
disposal system and Correct article usage
a
also
recycling system.Rephrase
apply
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