The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours.

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The table reveals the results of a survey which involves the views of male and female

members

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of a

sport

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sports

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club

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about its opening hours and facilities.

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most of

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women

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the women

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of the

club

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are not satisfied with the range of activities. The proportion of satisfaction with the variety of

club

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activities of male

members

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accounted for about 55%.

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, female

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of a fitness centre constituted nearly 30% of satisfaction with the range of

pastime

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compared to only 5% of negative feedback from men.

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, the genders were more in agreement about the

club

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facilities .

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, most

women

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gave positive feedback for opening hours (approximately 72%),

while

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the percentage of satisfaction of male

members

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of the

club

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constituted 44%.

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, only 3% of

women

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were unhappy,

whereas

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nearly 40% of the men expressed their dissatisfaction.

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, 25% and 19% of positive feedback about opening hours were given by

women

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and men respectively.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

159 words

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The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours.

In many countries are investing new technology to deal with the public. Why it is happening? Do you think it is an appropriate use of goverment money?

Nowadays there is a tendancy to relocate overseas for lucrative jobs.While a faction of people holds the notion that this movement is challanging (?)for juveniles, others argue that it is better for children.

Childood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia as many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsilbility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree to this statement?