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The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours.

The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club's activities, facilities and opening hours.
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The table reveals the results of a survey which involves the views of male and female
members
 of a
sport
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sports
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club
 about its opening hours and facilities.
It is clear that
 most of
women
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the women
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 of the
club
 are not satisfied with the range of activities. The proportion of satisfaction with the variety of
club
 activities of male
members
 accounted for about 55%.
In contrast
, female
members
 of a fitness centre constituted nearly 30% of satisfaction with the range of
pastime
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pastimes
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 compared to only 5% of negative feedback from men.
Furthermore
, the genders were more in agreement about the
club
 facilities .
In addition
, most
women
 gave positive feedback for opening hours (approximately 72%),
while
 the percentage of satisfaction of male
members
 of the
club
 constituted 44%.
By contrast
, only 3% of
women
 were unhappy,
whereas
 nearly 40% of the men expressed their dissatisfaction.
Furthermore
, 25% and 19% of positive feedback about opening hours were given by
women
 and men respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words members, club, women with synonyms.
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