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The graph illustrates the percentage of people living in cities in four countries from 1970-2040.

The graph illustrates the percentage of people living in cities in four countries from 1970-2040.
The
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 line graph illustrates the percentage of the
population
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 living in four different cities in four countries (the Philipines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia) for over four decades from 1970-2040.
Overall
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, the percentage of the
population
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 in all countries is expected to increase in the future.
While
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 the
population
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 in Malaysia will be the highest, Thailand will have
less
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 people. With regards to the number of people living in the city in the Philippines, it
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been
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grown
growing
 from around 30% in 1970 to 70% in 2023, and it is expected that the
rate
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 will climb to 80%
at the end
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 of the period.
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, the
rate
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 of the
population
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 living in cities in Indonesia
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been rising from almost 10% in the first year to around 60% at present, and it will
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continue
 to grow, reaching 70% in the
last
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 year.
On the other hand
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, the average
rate
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 of the
populatio
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population
 living in the city in Malaysia has been increasing rapidly from about 30% in the first year to about 80% in 2023, and it
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predicted that the
rate
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 is going to climb to less than 90% in the end. The
population
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rate
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 in Thailand will show an upward trend

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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