The benefits and drawbacks of studying at international schools. Agree or dissagree

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school. we can define
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people, or others. I agree every
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have positive sides and negative sides.
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studying
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studying at international
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a good curriculum for
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, in Indonesia, there are many international
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national
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tools learning, instructional design learning,
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' thinking and facilities at international could improve all
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can improve
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expert teachers.
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is more expensive than
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have many benefit and drawback based on the personal. if the
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want their children can improve
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could support their capability and their parents' have a lot of money to pay
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