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Some people believe that it is a waste of time ot read read newspapers and watch news on televison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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task achievement
The essay provided does not address the assigned topic regarding the view on reading newspapers and watching news on television and its perceived value. Always ensure to respond to the specific prompt given.
coherence and cohesion
The text presented is repetitive with two identical paragraphs, indicating a lack of logical structure and development. For a higher score, introduce distinct ideas in each paragraph and develop them with supporting sentences.
lexical resource
Due to the repetition and lack of content, an assessment of lexical resource is not possible. Ensure a diverse and appropriate use of vocabulary in response to the actual essay topic.
grammatical range
While grammatical assessment is limited by the brief and repetitive nature of the content, always use a range of structures accurately to meet the requirements of a high-scoring essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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