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Writing Samples
Band 2

The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below
illistartes
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illustrate
us
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to us
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 the exchanges of buildings
graund
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ground
floor
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floors
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during
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over
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 43 years. The office had more rooms and more available facilities than
other
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the other
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 one. Meanwhile,
Flower
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the Flower
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 shop had nearly 2 times
less
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fewer
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 rooms.
Only
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The only
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things
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thing
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 that
do
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does
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 not change after so long time is
kitchen
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the kitchen
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. In all
buildings
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buildings,
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 it stayed in
same
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the same
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 place. In 1958 when it was
office
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an office
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 area, after
walked
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walking
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in
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into
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house
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the house
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, there
is
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were
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 offices
to
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for
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secretary
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a secretary
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, manager, and
assistanse
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assistant
.
Also
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on
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in
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 the right corner was
reception
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the reception
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 area and in the left top corner was
meeting
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the meeting
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 room. In 1985 they were changed
like
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into
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a
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an
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 apartment. There
was
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were
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 2 bedrooms and
living
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a living
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 room.
Furtermore
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Furthermore
, they had huge
bathroom
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bathrooms
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 and
shower
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showers
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 place. Flower
shop
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shops
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 that suitable in the present have the biggest changes. In the left corner
gifts
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gift
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 cards and under them is
play
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a play
the play
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 area. Just below the right under, office for
shops
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shop
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 staff.
Therefore
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, all other
floor
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floors
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giving
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are giving
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for
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apply
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flower
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flowers
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.
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coherence cohesion
There are numerous grammatical errors present, and the language is somewhat difficult to follow, which can confuse the reader. The structure is not cohesive, as information is presented without clear transitions or organization.
task achievement
The response does not appropriately fulfill the requirements of the task. The message is not clear, and key features are not accurately compared or well-described. Main points are unsupported with specific detail, causing a breakdown in task achievement.

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