"The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University.

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McGill University in the

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2005, 2010 and 2015.

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the sporting and societal facilities were awarded

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rating across all

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, the range of modules offered

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the least appreciated for all

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the library facilities generated the best reviews in the first five

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, the student services soon took over

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the most reviews in the final year. The University's teaching was the second best in 2005 (74) and third best in 2015(78) in

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similar manner, the reading infrastructure which was at the top of the league table in 2005 (86) and 2010(88) was the second in 2015 (87).

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the students seemed to have been neglected in 2005(54) they were soon prioritised and people thought the College performed well in offering Student services in 2015 (97). All things Sports and Social was said to only deserve the same score of 65 in all

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but the range of modules offered seemed to suffer a steady decline from 39 in 2005 to 25 points in 2015.

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"The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University.

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