the charts below show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US

the charts below  show information about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US
The bar graphs illustrate data about
honey
-bee groups and
honey making
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honey-making
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in America during 40
years
. As can be seen, the
honey
-bee colonies lasted 40
years
. The
honey
-bee groups increased from 4
millions
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to 4.3
millions
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million
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during the first 10
years
. That was the time it reached its top. 10
years
later,the number of the
honey
-bee population decreased to 0.8 million ( 3.5
millions
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). Between 2000 to 2010,
the
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honey-bees
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honeybees
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went down
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by
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2.6 million and 1.8 million respectively. It could be noticed that
honey
production was from 1970-2010. In 1970, America made 130,000
tonnes
of
bee's
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honey
. 10
years
later, the quantity of
honey
making dropped
110,000
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by 110,000
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tonnes
. During the
next
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following 20
years
, a number of
honey
production
growed
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120,000
tonnes
after that reduced
100,000
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tonnes
. In the
last
10
years
,
the
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honey
production fell suddenly to 30,000
tonnes
, just 70,000
tonnes
and reached its bottom.
Overall
, swarms of bee
honey
and
honey making
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honey-making
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in the US have similar trends. Both of them have declined gradually over the
years
.
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