Some people say the government should spend money on providing faster public transport while others believe the government should give priority to other factors such as cost and the effect on environment. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction and Conclusion
The essay provided is incomplete and lacks an introduction, body paragraphs, and a fully constructed conclusion. To improve, ensure that your essay includes all these parts with a clear introduction that introduces the topic and your thesis, body paragraphs that support your viewpoint with logical arguments and examples, and a comprehensive conclusion that summarizes your points and restates your opinion.
Logical Structure
Your text did not form a coherent argument due to its brevity and missing parts. To score higher, build a clear logical progression of ideas throughout the essay. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and be linked to the overall argument with appropriate cohesive devices.
Supported Main Points
While the conclusion suggests a stance, the body of the essay is missing; thus, there are no supported main points. For a higher score, expand your essay to include clear, developed arguments that illustrate and support your viewpoint. Make use of examples and explanations to substantiate your main points.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • environmentally friendly
  • productivity
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • sustainable
  • affordability
  • accessibility
  • ecological impact
  • government spending
  • technology
  • social benefit
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