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The charts below give information on the age of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the age of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The pie charts illustrate the
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population's
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 age of both Yemen and Italy in 2000 and
its
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 2050.
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 the proportion of
people
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 under 14 in Yemen in 2000 was larger than that of Italy, in 2050
this
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 young
population
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 will be decreased in both countries.
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 the figures related to Yemen's
population
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, the under-14-year-old
population
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 will decline from more than 50% (51%) in 2000 to 37% in 2050.
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, the share of
people
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 between 15 and 59
years
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 will experience a slight rise of about 2% (from 3.6% to 5.7%).
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, the number of
people
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 above 60
years
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 contributed to 46.3% of the
population
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,
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 proportion will change and increase
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to 57.3% in 2050. With regard to Italy's pie charts the number of
people
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 until 14
years
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 old and between 15 and 59
years
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 old will fall from above14% (14.3%) to 11.5% and from nearly 62% (61.6%) to 46.2% respectively.
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, the share of the elderly
population
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 will have a remarkable growth until 2050.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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