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the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the average domestic
energy
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 consumption and
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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 in an Australian household.
Energy
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 is mainly utilized for heating, water heating, cooling, lighting, refrigeration, and other electrical
appliances
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.
Overall
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, power is mainly used for heating, and the lowest power is used for cooling purposes.
To begin
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 with, the ratio between
energy
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 usage and
greenhouse
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emissions
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 in Australian households were significantly the same;
however
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,
gas
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 emission from cooling, other
appliances
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, refrigeration, and lighting was higher than the
energy
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 used.
In addition
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, the highest utilization of power was for heating( 42% ) and,
as a result
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 of
energy
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 used,
greenhouse
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gas
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 emission was 10% lower.
Furthermore
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, the second highest
energy
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 was used for water heating (30%), and the
gas
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 emission was 15%.
On the other hand
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,
energy
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 and
greenhouse
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emissions
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 from cooling, lighting, heating, refrigeration, and other electrical
appliances
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 remained lower than 30%.
However
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, the
gas
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emissions
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 from other
appliances
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 resulted in 13% more
gas
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emissions
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas, emissions, appliances with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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