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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The projected bar chart gives information about the proportion of world
illiteracy
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 divided by region, by gender
last
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 year.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that in 6 categories the proportion of
females
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 is always higher than that of
male
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males
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,
while
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 South
Asia
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 experienced the highest
illiteracy
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 rates, the opposite was true for developed countries with only a tiny fraction of
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
illiteracy
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 by men and women. In detail, in terms of Latin American/Caribbean, 10% of males and 12% of
females
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 were illiterate, which
10
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is 10
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 times as much as in the figure for developed countries was only 1% for
male
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males
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 and 2% for
female
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females
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. Meanwhile, under 10% of males are illiterate and 20%
for
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of
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females
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 is the figure for East
Asia
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/Oceania.
In addition
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, the
illiteracy
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 rates in men in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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was
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were
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 over 30%, under 30%,
approximately
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and approximately
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 35% respectively.
Besides
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 that, the highest percentage of illiterate
females
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 was observed in South
Asia
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 at 55%, followed by Arab States at 51% and Sub-Saharan Africa at 48%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, females, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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