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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and teabuying and drinking habits in five Australlan cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and teabuying and drinking habits in five Australlan cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the results in five Australian urban areas of a survey about citizen's
coffe
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coffee
 and
teabuying
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tea buying
 and drinking habits.
Overall
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, in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks,
people
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 that went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea had the highest number in most
cities
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.
On the other hand
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, the urban
people
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 in Australia purchasing fresh
coffee
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 were the least in those five
cities
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. Going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea was the favourite
activitiy
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activity
 for Australian
people
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 in big
cities
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. In four
cities
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, except
Adelaide
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,
this
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 activity is the most liked. In Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart, the percentages
was
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were
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 above 60 %,
while
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 in Brisban,
this
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 habit was just over
a
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apply
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half (around 53%).
Nevertheless
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,
people
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 in
Adelaide
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 preferred to buy instant
coffee
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,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 50%
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of that
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that
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those who
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 loved
this
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 habit.
In contrast
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, buying fresh
coffee
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 was less popular conduct in Australia.
Furthermore
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, All
cities
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 had
percentage
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a percentage
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 no more than 50%.
In addition
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, only Sydney and Melbourne
that
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apply
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had a number than forty
percent
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per cent
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. The others
such
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 as Brisban,
Adelaide
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, and Hobart had about 33%, 34%, and 39%, respectively. Meanwhile purchasing instant had an average
about
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of about
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 45%-50% and took second place in every
citiy
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city
, except
Adelaide
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, cities, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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