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The bar chart below shows the number of daily users (in millions) for Twitter, LinkedIn, and Instagram from 2010 to 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of daily users (in millions) for Twitter, LinkedIn, and Instagram from 2010 to 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the three different social media platforms (Twitter, LinkedIn and Instagram) used by personalities from different fields and their influences in the two years 2018 and 2021.
Overall
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, in the
beginning
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 time,
Selena
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Gomez
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 had much influence over
others
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while
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Chritiano
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Christiano
Cristiano
 Ronaldo was less than
Gomez
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 but, over the years it changed dramatically and Ronaldo became the top influencer by overtaking
Gomez
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as well as
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 other
celebraties
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celebrities
. In 2018,
Selena
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Gomez
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 had followers over 100
million
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 and Christiano Ronalo and Ariana Grande
also
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 had influence just over 100
million
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 at that time. But,
others
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such
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 as The Rock and Kylie Jenner had just below 100
million
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. To compare,
Selena
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 was the highest influencer at that period.
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,
Selena
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's popularity reduced in 2021 which made her
least
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 popular celebrity among
others
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 and she had almost 250
million
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 followers still less than
others
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.
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, Christiano became
top
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 influencer in the same year by taking over more than 300
million
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 followers.
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, remaining artist influences
also
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 increased over the period around 250
million
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 but still less than Ronalo.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words selena, gomez, others, million with synonyms.
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