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The graph below shows average cabon dixide emmisions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average cabon dixide emmisions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph illustrates the
amount
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 of
carbon
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dioxise
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dioxide
 each person
emmit
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emits
 in the
UK
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,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. Overview, the average
emmision
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emission
 resulted from both Italy and Portugal citizens
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experiencing an upward trend meanwhile
UK
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emmision
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emission
 rate was experiencing a downward trend from 1967 to 2007.
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the
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Sweden
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were
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 having a fluctuation in the given period. In 1977,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal
were having
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had
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 an increasing
amount
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 of
co2
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CO2
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waste
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 with
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Sweden
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 production
increased
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increasing
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 the most. Meanwhile, The United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 was relatively stable with
estimately
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estimated
estimate
estimates
 around 11 metric tonnes and still the country with the highest co2
emmision
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emission
emissions
 compared to others. In the next ten years, Italy and
portugal
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Portugal
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Carbon
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 dioxide
waste
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 kept
increased
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increasing
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 and eventually Italy
has
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surpassed
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sweden
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Sweden
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 in producing CO2.
This
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 made Italy
became
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the second country with the highest CO2
waste
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.
In Contrast
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, Both
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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 and
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the UK
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UK
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UK's
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 production of
carbon
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 dioxide
were
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was
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 experiencing a downward trend. There were not many changes in the
co2
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CO2
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amount
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 produced
untill
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until
 2007 with
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Sweden
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are
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continuosly
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continuously
produced
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producing
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 less
amount
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 of
carbon
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waste
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 and both
Italy
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Italy's
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 and
Portugal
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Portugal's
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 citizens kept increasing the
amount
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 of
co2
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CO2
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emmisions
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emissions
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, carbon, uk, sweden, co, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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