The process diagram illustrates the manufacture the bricks for the building industry in 7 steps.
The process diagram illustrates the manufacture
the
Change preposition
of the
bricks
for the building industry in 7 steps.
As can be seen in the graph, there are seven steps to build
Wrong verb form
building
bricks
for a
industry. When we Change the article
an
taking
a closer look Wrong verb form
take
in
the first step; there is Change preposition
at
a
one digger to take Remove the article
apply
of
the Change preposition
apply
clay
in to
the soil. They Join the words
into
take
off the Wrong verb form
took
clay
and the clay
was put into a metal grid by the employees. After that
they use a roller to separate the huge clays.
Add a comma
that,
Furthermore
they put water and salt into the Add a comma
Furthermore,
clay
then
they use a mould to build new bricks
. Its
crystal clear that they use a drying oven to dry all of the Correct your spelling
It's
bricks
in approximately 24-48 hours. On top of that, they put the bricks
into a moderate kiln
in
200 – 980 degrees when the moderate Change preposition
at
kiln
is done they put them in the high kiln
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
depends
Wrong verb form
depending
to
870 to 1300 degrees above the Change preposition
on
bricks
. The third step is about the kiln
is , cooling
chamber ; the Correct article usage
the cooling
bricks
puts
into there and they are cooling for 48 to 72 hours. Change the verb form
put
Finally
they are Add a comma
Finally,
packaging
and starting to be delivered
Wrong verb form
packaged
Overall
, as can be seen in the graph, there are several steps to do bricks
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