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The process diagram illustrates the manufacture the bricks for the building industry in 7 steps.

The process diagram illustrates the manufacture the bricks for the building industry in 7 steps.
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The process diagram illustrates the manufacture
the
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bricks
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 for the building industry in 7 steps. As can be seen in the graph, there are seven steps to
build
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building
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bricks
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 for
a
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 industry. When we
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 a closer look
in
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 the first step; there is
a
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one digger to take
of
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the
clay
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in to
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 the soil. They
take
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took
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 off the
clay
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 and the
clay
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 was put into a metal grid by the employees. After
that
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 they use a roller to separate the huge clays.
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Furthermore
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 they put water and salt into the
clay
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then
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 they use a mould to build new
bricks
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.
Its
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 crystal clear that they use a drying oven to dry all of the
bricks
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 in approximately 24-48 hours. On top of that, they put the
bricks
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 into a moderate
kiln
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in
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 200 – 980 degrees when the moderate
kiln
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 is done they put them in the high
kiln
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it
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depends
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to
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on
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 870 to 1300 degrees above the
bricks
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. The third step is about the
kiln
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 is ,
cooling
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the cooling
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 chamber ; the
bricks
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puts
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 into there and they are cooling for 48 to 72 hours.
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Finally
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 they are
packaging
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 and starting to be delivered
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, as can be seen in the graph, there are several steps to do
bricks
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, clay, kiln with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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