The bar chart shows the participation of children is selected leisure activities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the participation of children is selected leisure activities in Australia.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart displays the engagement rate, by gender, of children between the ages of 5 and 14  in several leisure activities in Australia.
Overall
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, the
boys
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engage more than
girls
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in almost all the activities except
art
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arts
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and
craft
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crafts
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. As we can see, 
girls
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took part in
art
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arts
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and
craft
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crafts
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, which is the only activity where their rate surpasses the engagement of
boys
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, bike riding, and electronic/computer, all at almost identical rates (around 60%. ).
Furthermore
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, watching TV/videos is the only activity where the participation of the
girls
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and
boys
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is at the same level, with 100% of the children surveyed being involved.
On the other hand
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, apart from watching TV/videos, the
boys
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show a preference for electronic/computer games, which are enjoyed by 80% of them, and bike riding, 10% less preferred than electronic/computer games.
Whereas
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, the least preferred, by both
boys
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and
girls
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, is skateboarding/rollerblading,  with 40% of participation by the former, and 30% by the latter.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Participation rates
  • Leisure activities
  • Notable differences
  • Popularity
  • Trends
  • Time period
  • Comparison
  • Contrast
  • Gender preferences
  • External factors
  • Implications
  • Cultural influences
  • Facilities availability
  • Technological effects
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