The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make 

comparisons where relevant.
the tables depicts
the
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information about the amount of cell phones which were
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in
million
for
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over a six
years
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year
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of
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period from 2006 to 2012 after analyzing the table, in 2006
samsung
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had the lowest
number
of
user
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users
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round
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around
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about 117
million
which rose to 396
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million
miilion
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million
after
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six
year
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after that no record had been registered for
apple
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Apple
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comapny
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company
in the first
year
but it rose gradually each
year
and hit its peak reaching to 135
million
in total in 2012 but for
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in 2017 recorded 107miilion of phone sold
then
it showed
downward
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trend and
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touching
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lowest point of 28
million
furthermore
,
for
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nokia
the
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first saw a total
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revenue
of 345
million
which
then
rose to 436
million
in
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year
after some fluctuation
reached
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and reached
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to
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nearly 335
million
while
for
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motorola
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had the second highest user
in
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total
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of 210
million
but the
number
had been declined
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significantly
segnificantly
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significantly
each
year
and reached to 28
million
in total
overall
, it is vividly manifested that
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nokia
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and
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Motorola
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motorola
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had the highest
number
in total at the
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beginning
begaining
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beginning
of the
year
whilst
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samsung
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and
apple
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Apple
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had the largest
number
of
user
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users
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at the end
of the
year
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, number, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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  • annual sales
  • fluctuations
  • market saturation
  • technological advancements
  • consumer trends
  • brand dominance
  • growth trajectory
  • market share
  • innovations
  • peak sales
  • decline
  • stagnate
  • proliferate
  • exponential growth
  • market dynamics
  • forecast
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