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Nowadays people depends on newspapers,radios,television and the internet for news and information.Which in your opinion is the best way for getting news and why?

There are a variety of
ways
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 to get
news
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,
such
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 as radio, newspaper, television and the
intenet
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Internet
. people have
freedom
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the freedom
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 to choose the suitable
way
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 to get
news
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. Each
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ways
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way
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have
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has
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 both advantages and disadvantages
eventhough
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even
that
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though
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 I
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prefer
prefered
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prefered it
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. In my
opinin
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opinion
opinin'
, I think using the
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internet
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Internet
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 to
getting
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news
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 is the best
way
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. Nowadays, using
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internet
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the internet
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 is the easiest
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ways
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way
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 to get
an
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accurate and
a credible
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credible news
a piece of credible news
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news
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.
Internet
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 is the main
revulution
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revolution
 around the
word
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world
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 that provides normal
accesibility
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accessibility
 for
everybodies
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everybody
, especially after
popularity
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the popularity
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 of using
smatr
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smart
 phones. Widely using
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internet
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the internet
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 makes it
imposible
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impossible
 for every
citizens
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citizen
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 to
reach
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access
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internet
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the internet
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easier
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as easily
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than
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as
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 before. Global
audience
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audiences
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every where
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everywhere
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 can hear the same
news
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.
Inaddition
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In addition
, there are
enormous
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an enormous
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 of websites on the
internet
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those
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that
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 can give everyone a chance to choose the real one. So, ease
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of accesibilty
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accesibilty
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accessibility
 and
availablity
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availability
 of
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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all of these features make it the best
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ways
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way
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 to use. Un- -
fortunatly
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Fortunately
,
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the government
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government
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governments
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 of some poor countries have no ability to offer the
internet
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for
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to
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 people
all
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at all
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 times
a
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of
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 day. Even though, they
even
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apply
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have
a
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apply
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little time to read or hear
news
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 by
using
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use
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 other
ways
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. The cost of
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internet
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the internet
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 is very expensive.
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, the ancient
way
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 that
had
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has
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disappered
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disappeared
 since
creation
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the creation
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 of television
is
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was
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radio
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the radio
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where
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which
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it
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was the most popular
way
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 before more than thirty years old. It had transferred
a local famous
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local famous news
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news
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 and the least of international
news
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.
Moreover
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, there was some problem
in
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with
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 the channel frequency and there was no
a
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apply
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variety of channels,
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this
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which
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 made it difficult to
used
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 it. The third one is television,
that
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which
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 needs
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the
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present
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 of
screen
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the screen
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 and
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a spesific
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spesific
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specific
 time to hear the
news
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.
Newspaper
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The newspaper
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 was the
oldes
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oldest
way
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 that almost most of
population
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the population
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 do not interest to use it. Because they used to use
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the smart
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smart phone
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smartphone
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on
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in
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 their hands.
Overall
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, usage of
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internet
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the internet
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 is the
most
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best
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way
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 to reach local and international
news
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 everywhere around the world even in
samll
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small
village
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villages
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. It is a
way
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 that comprehensive availability,
accuray
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accuracy
 and ease to reach any channels.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Editorial process
  • Rigorous
  • Accuracy
  • Credibility
  • Immediacy
  • In-depth analysis
  • Comprehensive
  • Multi-media engagement
  • Accessibility
  • Global audience
  • Discussion platforms
  • Information overload
  • Critical thinking
  • Cost-effective
  • Subscription costs
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